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Ilana – your design with the star of david constructed out of words was really effective – it is delicate and you can see how it is constructed – the words become scaffolding. it looks like it could fall apart at any moment – still it’s the only fixed part of your project. everything else is moving. i think the words could have moved more fluidly and maybe a little faster. i think this is the best thing you’ve done yet! also, as someone who loves words, i’m really glad you were inspired by heavyindustries.
it’s always a bold move to put your raw emotions out there for other people to see – great work.
Jordan – this was a really interesting concept that seems worth continuing. your collaborator has a beautiful voice. i wished there could have been even more tweaking – i think the song could have become so much more. somewhere in the middle there were a few notes that you had manipulated sounding almost like guitar strings – this was disjointed in a very effective way. overall, i really enjoyed it.
Thea – Based on the video documentation, I think you did a nice job of linking your passion for installation with the success of your recent sound project. The work comes off as a quasi-frog. It gives me the feeling that it is in the wrong place. And then I start to question place, thinking about man-made ‘nature’ places like parks and zoos. the work up against the white paint of the staircase gives a very specific kind of glow, like coming upon some radioactive trash. But closer inspection makes the project much clearer. It would be interesting to see the work in a more natural setting and see it moving (solar powered?) Overall, I really liked it.
Stephanie – I gotta say, I’m not sure what was going on in your project. I thought it seemed like a fresh concept and something I haven’t seen before and I liked that. But the message wasn’t clear enough. After reading your proposal, I got a better idea and started to get excited about it. A map of the world with sound spots would have been great! Maybe I wasn’t getting the sound on my computer? I wonder what the sound would have sounded like.. this is worth continuing and thinking through.
Christine – Your idea is clear to me. Sounded like you were having some trouble with the project – at the last minute it stopped working? Each object makes one motion for me. Day changed to night. the flower lost a few petals, and the watering bucket gave water. I think you maybe planned for more to happen but I’m not sure. I like the clean-cut shapes and the game environment. But the project feels unfinished.
Nikki and Justine – I really enjoyed your project. It was fun to watch and did a great job of integrating drawn elements into the video. I liked how you sprung from Nikki’s newspaper project to expand into a real time environment.
Samantha – I like Chuck Close too. I thought the image 1 and 2 were the most successful because they were so different. the first was more obviously a chuck close and the second allowed the viewer to create their own chuck close. Was this a critique of Chuck Close’s grid system? As in, anyone can make a Chuck Close if they adhere to this easy step by step recipe?
Shae – Thought this was really successful in every aspect – the timing, color scheme, composition etc. Only thing I didn’t understand was the title. Fun to watch and think about.
Marissa – Don’t know much about music but I really liked how your work evolved from the original. Very interesting transition. It has a distinct rhythm but enough freedom exists within that rhythm for my thoughts to wander. These were soothing sounds. Was this intentional? Was the original something you created from scratch?
Thanks for the feedback